08-07-2014, 08:11 PM
I understand the thought process behind your writing. We all have moments where we sit and wonder why we're here, what it all means and whether we're on the right track. However, I wish you had painted a more specific picture with your words. Initially I didn't like this poem, after reading it aloud a few times though I am beginning to wonder if it's not lovely in it's own simplicity. Your words have made me think about life as a very stark, fractured and short experience, just like your poem.