If I Awake to Flames After I Die

[SomeRandom]

I could especially use help with punctuation!

If I awake to flames after I die
to make eternal payment for my sin,
I will not raise my voice to question why
remembering the man that I had been.
But cast into oblivion, if He, good place for a colon, I think.
the Perfect Judge, should look my way with grace
and offer lovingly to pardon me
if only I would run again life’s race felt kinda chunky when reading. I didn't like the stress on the "a"
more faithfully, without conceited pride,
the greed-filled lies, the lust, this time to live:
my passions and my past to set aside…
I know one thing alone I'd never give.
Those moments spent with you I would not sell
to save my soul eternity in hell.

I like the how the poem starts with "eternal payment" and then ends with a refusal to sell. The bargaining makes it seem very typical of a religious monologue inside one's head. I found L12 particularly powerful because it is reaching a limit within your soul-- the last thing that you could not possibly budge on!