Happiness Forgets

[Leanne]

A loose suited cool linen swagger -- loose-suited?
eclipses the burden of daylight
adjusting down well-trodden steps, -- a semi-colon is probably better here
nicotine fingernails trail on billboard walls
to an ugly door that opens with a mumble.

The bar stools gesture through half closed eyes -- love this!
lifted from beer mat stares,
closing again with a head back sip.

Hips sway through pungent clouds,
reverb touches seersucker on stilettos, -- nice alliteration
heavy handed from a dub step base.

He falls familiar to a corner seat and closes his mind, -- would you consider "Familiarly he falls..."? And a semi-colon instead of the comma
behind the aroma of a Black Russian, he slips
under the underground again. -- perfect ending

I felt transported by this, as if the everyday world melted away the moment he stepped through the door. As you'll note, my suggestions are minimal.