08-02-2014, 03:15 AM
Quote: Watched timid roosters knitting anxious sweaters
Off the strength of that line alone I have to say that it felt overwhelmingly as though you were describing a lucid dream. Maybe you were, maybe you weren't, but I liked the way you made me envision these things taking place. You mentioned in your author's notes that you were trying to rhyme sometimes and other times not. Rhyming isn't always necessary but it certainly makes for a little more bounce on the trampoline. Anyways, you make precious feel like a million pretzels.
Kisses!

