Four Shorts

[ajcohen613]

best to just post one poem in a thread ajc as it's a tad unfair to expect four replies off each person.

the idea i think is to use as much brevity as possile while showing a strong image. no problems in general with the first three but the last one needs something better on the last line.

crows on a wire
black sun cut in half
by sharp plains

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leaves falling
a children’s park buried
in dead reminders

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floral skirt
wind runs through her curls
picking up petals

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a match sparks
eyes appear from darkness
seeing only eyes for me this line fails to show or tell me anything. it also begs the question " wouldn't the match also be seen"?

Yea I kind of snuck in more than one. My bad. But they're short so it shouldn't hurt too bad.