07-29-2014, 06:51 AM
Dupuis,
I'm wondering how this "thread" is "calm in all its continuity" but "easily slackens into...of unease"? As Inigo Montoya said to Vizzini in The Princess Bride, "I don't think that word means what you think it means".
As "thread" is not define as any particular type of thread, or as a metaphor for something else, one must assume that it is simply "a thread".
"Flickering" suggests fire of some sort, not a thread. However it is an excellent example of a mixed metaphor.
Some punctuation would help with clarity and possibly give some meaning to what is here.
Just wondering if "not taut" is suppose to be a play on "not taught"? If it is, I think using "taught" rather than "taut" would work better.
Just curious, does your nom de plume refer to Roy Dupuis, or that French savant Charles-something Dupuis, or to someone else?
Dale
I'm wondering how this "thread" is "calm in all its continuity" but "easily slackens into...of unease"? As Inigo Montoya said to Vizzini in The Princess Bride, "I don't think that word means what you think it means".
As "thread" is not define as any particular type of thread, or as a metaphor for something else, one must assume that it is simply "a thread".
"Flickering" suggests fire of some sort, not a thread. However it is an excellent example of a mixed metaphor.
Some punctuation would help with clarity and possibly give some meaning to what is here.
Just wondering if "not taut" is suppose to be a play on "not taught"? If it is, I think using "taught" rather than "taut" would work better.
Just curious, does your nom de plume refer to Roy Dupuis, or that French savant Charles-something Dupuis, or to someone else?
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.