Caps

[John Galt]

Thanks John. My intent here was an attempt at ambiguity between past and present tenses. The word "could" is still a problem, I think.
Paul

You may have to explain your intent to me a little more, does it have a point for the reader? is it something the reader can experience.?

My reading gave me a feeling of wistfulness for instance, and the "ambiguity" between past and present tense never entered my mind.

Hope that makes sense....JG

No, you are correct. That intent does not really do much for the reader. If I were to ditch that indulgence it would likely read....

When the sun was right
we would light off caps
with my little brother's glasses.

Tiger, I see your intent now, it was the word "ambiguity" that threw me. I really like the tense and wording of your first post. And there is a payoff for the reader. JG

Tiger, for some reason the reply section of my blackbird poem will not let me thank you for the read and post you have left there without tacking it onto the post that I left for "mark," so I will do it here, Thanks..JG