The Race

[just mercedes]

On time I was swimming in a lake and was climbing onto a dock that was about thirty yards from shore, As I put my hands down to get up on the dock, one feel on a nice fat water moccasin, the next thing I knew, I was standing on the shore. I have no recollection how that occurred. I'm amusing fear temporary suspended my memory to put all of my resources into getting away from the danger. That was the idea I was going for here. I do see an edit I need to make hang to hung.

"a bit slow in the first few lines" I could reverse them to

"It is deep twilight when
bus lets him off." better

"Two 'house' close together." Sorry, don't get what you are referring to. line 4 and line 9 - maybe I'm just too picky here

As always I appreciate you comments,

Dale

I had a tiger snake rise up out of the wooden floor of an old long-drop toilet, once, while I was sitting there having a pee. I levitated instantly backwards to stand on the bench, still peeing. I know that instant when your body reacts without you!