The Race
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On time I was swimming in a lake and was climbing onto a dock that was about thirty yards from shore, As I put my hands down to get up on the dock, one feel on a nice fat water moccasin, the next thing I knew, I was standing on the shore. I have no recollection how that occurred. I'm amusing fear temporary suspended my memory to put all of my resources into getting away from the danger. That was the idea I was going for here. I do see an edit I need to make hang to hung.

"a bit slow in the first few lines" I could reverse them to

"It is deep twilight when
bus lets him off."

"Two 'house' close together." Sorry, don't get what you are referring to.

As always I appreciate you comments,

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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Messages In This Thread
The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 08:14 AM
RE: The Race - by just mercedes - 07-12-2014, 08:38 AM
RE: The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 08:59 AM
RE: The Race - by just mercedes - 07-12-2014, 10:31 AM
RE: The Race - by Tiger the Lion - 07-12-2014, 09:56 AM
RE: The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 10:15 AM



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