The Race
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Fun poem - great noir images! I like it - a bit slow in the first few lines (passive). Two 'house' close together. the next thing he knows - clunky, took me out of the flow. Third to last line - get dressed? Thanks for posting this. I may go and weed my garden now. Smile
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The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 08:14 AM
RE: The Race - by just mercedes - 07-12-2014, 08:38 AM
RE: The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 08:59 AM
RE: The Race - by just mercedes - 07-12-2014, 10:31 AM
RE: The Race - by Tiger the Lion - 07-12-2014, 09:56 AM
RE: The Race - by Erthona - 07-12-2014, 10:15 AM



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