07-07-2014, 12:50 AM
Hi Keith. Great poem. Brilliantly titled.
Only suggestion is to cut "thing" in L1. You have a strange unit or creature made up of multiple cats and cats are too temperamental for that.
I really love this. I liked it right away but it took a minute to build and form and it's brilliant.
oh and you might try a colon to end S5L3; what follows isn't exactly a sentence.
Thank you for the poem.
Only suggestion is to cut "thing" in L1. You have a strange unit or creature made up of multiple cats and cats are too temperamental for that.
I really love this. I liked it right away but it took a minute to build and form and it's brilliant.
oh and you might try a colon to end S5L3; what follows isn't exactly a sentence.
Thank you for the poem.