The Goldfish (edit 2)

[bena]

For me it is hard to relate to a goldfish contemplating its own fate...poor things have a brain so tiny their memory is only 6 seconds...kind of like Dory in Finding Nemo. I suppose the piece works on some levels...it could be a metaphor for man. I would hyphenate "blind-sided" or make it two words. It is a bit vague, but introspective. I think you can rework to improve it, as you've said.

Just my two cents, which is worth nothing.


bena/mel