The Goldfish (edit 2)

[Brownlie]

This is not bad, though a goldfish is incapable of human speech. Just being facetious with you though.

Sometimes, I'd drift
on eddies of my own
unknown making; flotsam
from a child's journey
of life and death discovery. -- The way it's written, I read death discovery as one phrase which seems to be an important moment of epiphany in a child's life.
Jettisoned.

Sometimes, I'd tail-flick
into the perpetual pipeline
that returns me unaware
to my immutable aqueous present.
Recycled.

Mostly I stared out
into the refracted, convex,
ever-expanding universe
through a dim ochre
upside-down shadow of myself.
Reflective.

Once, I was rolled
by a seismic concussion.
Blindsided, agape,
flapping, tapering, gasping
at overwhelming clarity.
Exposed.

But I was scooped and saved -- Maybe a comma after But. There is also that old maxim that you should never start a sentence with but that you may want to consider.
by a teacup drowning,
sieved, flipped and sluiced
back into my cold clouded cyclical
inescapable bowl;
Irreversible. -- I'm not sure irreversible can stand alone as an independent article.

To me, I see a goldfish in a bowl as a piece of furniture in someone's house. Perhaps when I owned one I formed a small attachment to it as a pet, but I didn't think much about it. However, from the viewpoint of the fish an incidence of knocking its bowl would be quite dramatic!