The Bird

[ChristopherSea]

Hello mallaloca and welcome to the site. I appreciate your message, but while you try to contrast the human and avian perception of borders, you have over anthropomorphized the bird in the poem, thereby diluting your argument. Think about it, from the bird’s eye view or an airborne human for the matter, lands have no borders. Perhaps that should be the most important point and done so in one or two stanzas with less repetition of the theme. See what you think. Good luck with your next edit./Chris