Caprice

[ellajam]

Moonlight moves the ocean
Lights up, circumstantial (What lights up? What is circumstantial?)
I want to walk on water
I will walk, I will

I will sink
Darkness hits (How?)
I spin around and I don't know
What is up and what is down?

So this is life
And this is death
At the same time, right now
I have to make a choice somehow

I don't know, I don't, I don't

It is a powerful poem and subject. A little bit more clarity would make it better in my opinion. Thanks for sharing.

What makes the poem powerful? Which lines lack clarity? If your critique is more specific it is more likely to help the poet.
Thanks and welcome. ella/mod