The Chamber

[just mercedes]

Not sure how I feel about this right now. Could use some help. Thanks


You don't consider the scratches why not? you don't explain this
futile clawing on the walls. why a period here?
Floors coated with
chipped fingernails and vomit. I don't think 'chipped' adds anything here
Parents vainly protecting children,
fearing they'll die first not clear who may die first
Herded into death marches
or vans deadlier than drunk driving. this comparison doesn't quite work for me
Unaware of the internment
that gave a grim chance how did internment give a grim chance?
they gasp for air,
expediting their death.
Looking for any answers
they see only Prussian blue. a reference to the by-product of the gas used in the Nazi extermination camps - I wonder if anyone will get that?

The Holocaust has inspired many people to write of their reaction. Your poem doesn't grab me with a new insight though. I think you could work further on this.