06-13-2014, 06:39 AM
I enjoyed this, although the somewhat archaic language seemed self-consciously 'poetic' at first. But after I'd finished, and read it again, I understood.
My nephew's wife had IVF, after years of attempts; they have twin girls now. I know what a heartbreak it is, wanting children and not conceiving. So the change of life impacts as a final 'No', I guess - at least it did for me. And perhaps that's why your poem sets itself at a distance from the reader - because that close ground is really rough territory.
Clever poem, with its updated Shakespearean take on this. Great emotional tone I thought.
My nephew's wife had IVF, after years of attempts; they have twin girls now. I know what a heartbreak it is, wanting children and not conceiving. So the change of life impacts as a final 'No', I guess - at least it did for me. And perhaps that's why your poem sets itself at a distance from the reader - because that close ground is really rough territory.
Clever poem, with its updated Shakespearean take on this. Great emotional tone I thought.