06-09-2014, 07:45 PM
What is this a Pantoum, no a Villanel? Sort of like both but it is neither. Regardless, this does not seem artificial, which usually seems to happens with these repeating line type poems. You do well with it. Is this a take off on Dylan Thomas' "Do Not Go Gentle into That Good Night?"
"Because their words had forked no lightning they"
"He jams his hungry fork from out the sky"
Seems a bit satirical.
Two of my favorite lines are:
"To add some spice to careless moon-lit larks.
I think he burns his passion far too bright"
A fun read,
Dale
"Because their words had forked no lightning they"
"He jams his hungry fork from out the sky"
Seems a bit satirical.
Two of my favorite lines are:
"To add some spice to careless moon-lit larks.
I think he burns his passion far too bright"
A fun read,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.