As if it knows

[Jimmy Stark]

[b]

Wandering through the forest
when the rain trickles Maybe use "where" instead of "when" here
down through the trees,

I come to a clearing
where the ferns grow densely
and what sun there is shines down through. This is nice, but maybe discuss how the light shines through the leaves and branches. Just be more visually stimulating in your words.
The sight commands a fallen knee and Why? Just because of the beauty?
begs worship of whatever it is that made
the forest and put me here to see it,
as the ferns glow, wet
in the dim grey light. This is nice. Really like the imagery

But there is nothing worthy of my reverence,
no one or no thing that placed me here
or made what I see
that could I call god or point to and say,
“it is you who are responsible,
thank you;” only a world
throbbing violently with life
that will shrivel up and die,
dragging me down with it,
as if it knows
I will remain thankful to
the end. This is a nice way to say that the world will go on without you. Maybe try and make this more grand and big though. Really show how little you are compared to the world and the universe