As if it knows

[tectak]

This is the serious workshopping forum. Will you? I ask an unclear question to show you what is wrong with your first stanza. You have not written a sentence UNLESS you INCLUDE the " I come to a clearing..." But you do not. Incomprehensibly you comma your way into another stanza. WHY? It is not purposeful. It is not sensible. It is not even stylistically poetic.
Wandering through the forest
when the rain trickles
down through the trees,

I come to a clearing
where the ferns grow densely
and what sun there is shines down through. A syntactical disconnect. This is appalling sentence structure and not worthy of serious crit. Shines down through what? I come to a clearing where what sun there is shines down through densely growing ferns.
The sight commands a fallen knee and How? Nonsense no matter how you try to explain the line.
begs worship of whatever it is that made Commands and at the same time begs. Nonsense.
the forest and put me here to see it,
as the ferns glow, wet
in the dim grey light. You are observing well but not putting enough effort into your choice of words."as" is simultaneously chronological and exclusive of all other time frames but that is not what you mean.

But there is nothing worthy of my reverence, "but" is a negative dependent conjunction BUT you have made no such linkage. Drop it or move it.
no one or no thing that placed me here
or made what I see
that could I call god or point to and say,
“it is you who are responsible,period
thank you;” only a world If you do not know how to use a semi colon, do not use one. No one will criticise you for a well chosen ommission
throbbing violently with life
that will shrivel up and die,
dragging me down with it,
as if it knows
I will remain thankful to
the end. Like every dog that has its day, this one has a short tail; a weak end.

Imagery is coming. You have good observational intent but you get over active in concept department.Keep calm and think your way through your poetry...read it out loud and if you stumble there is a problem.
Best,
tectak