06-01-2014, 11:33 AM
(06-01-2014, 11:05 AM)just mercedes Wrote: Only change I can suggest is -
tick
tock
ticks
depth, hell and despair - all abstract concepts
Wolves' claws don't pierce - they rub, grind against
abrade
bark
corrode
damage
erode
excoriate
gall
grate
graze
hurt
impair
inflame
irritate
peel
ruffle
scrape
scratch
skin
wear
(06-01-2014, 11:33 AM)LorettaYoung Wrote:(06-01-2014, 11:05 AM)just mercedes Wrote: Only change I can suggest is -
tick
tock
ticks
depth, hell and despair - all abstract concepts
Wolves' claws don't pierce - they rub, grind against
abrade
bark
corrode
damage
erode
excoriate
gall
grate
graze
hurt
impair
inflame
irritate
peel
ruffle
scrape
scratch
skin
wear
Hi Mercedes: Thank you for reading and commenting; actually like the sound of tick tick ticks, was suggested and I liked it. Yes, the abstract holds more interest for me usually than the concrete. I believe a wolf has very sharp pointy claws; and being pierced relates to his prayers at the cross, as well as the pain of despair, I could say tearing claws, but pierced is what I feel he is. Best, Loretta