Rats
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(05-21-2014, 07:21 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  Brownlie, you got an eek out of me. I hate mieces-to-pieces. I thought the poem may have stalled on 'My couching scent...', although I like the line. Additionally, the last stanza seems anticlimactic. Perhaps end it with your penultimate one. Otherwise this is as smooth as always. Cheers/Chris
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Rats - by Brownlie - 05-21-2014, 02:24 PM
RE: Rats - by ChristopherSea - 05-21-2014, 07:21 PM
RE: Rats - by Brownlie - 05-22-2014, 03:18 AM
RE: Rats - by StandingAlone - 05-22-2014, 09:27 AM
RE: Rats - by Brownlie - 05-22-2014, 10:17 AM
RE: Rats - by Erthona - 05-22-2014, 10:48 AM
RE: Rats - by Mopkins - 05-22-2014, 01:23 PM
RE: Rats - by Brownlie - 05-22-2014, 02:18 PM



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