how do i build a stronger poem rather than a catch

[allthingsworthy]

Cracked, sad, broken voice
downfall
you trip back
only to catch that tired-some face
Willowed days
Are now dressed in lace
Is there no greater love?
Only this false tenderness I speak of
the sea
how it diminishes me
It pulls me inwards
the white waves swallow me whole
a love I no longer want to know