05-19-2014, 09:34 PM
Hi Loretta!
Hmm...
There's a scene in the (very good, sez me) 1992 American film "A River Runs Through It" in which Tom Skerritt (playing a Great Depression-era minister in Montana, who is homeschooling his sons) has one of his boys write an essay. He marks it, then hands it back to him & says, "Half as long." I'll echo billy's comment that your poem seems too wordy. You've got some great images & your theme, a man turning into a beast and being compelled to act beastly, and being aware of the whole process even as he is unable (and perhaps, delicious secret of delicious secrets, unwilling; i.e. he likes it) to stop it, is certainly a fascinating one, but I think The Hour of the Wolf, like a rose bush, needs a little pruning to make it healthier & more impressive.
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Hmm...
There's a scene in the (very good, sez me) 1992 American film "A River Runs Through It" in which Tom Skerritt (playing a Great Depression-era minister in Montana, who is homeschooling his sons) has one of his boys write an essay. He marks it, then hands it back to him & says, "Half as long." I'll echo billy's comment that your poem seems too wordy. You've got some great images & your theme, a man turning into a beast and being compelled to act beastly, and being aware of the whole process even as he is unable (and perhaps, delicious secret of delicious secrets, unwilling; i.e. he likes it) to stop it, is certainly a fascinating one, but I think The Hour of the Wolf, like a rose bush, needs a little pruning to make it healthier & more impressive.
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