The "you" you've become

[Brownlie]

This was inspired by an old... Friend...

This isn't you;
In your tight jeans
with a cigarette between your teeth.
You're not "misunderstood,"
nor are you "finding yourself."
You are quitting, giving in.
What happened to you?
The perfectly polished hair.
The friendly white smile.
The drinking of cokes, not gin.
You aren't you,
not the "you" I fell in love with.
Not the "you" that you planed to be.
You've become what others wanted.
You've become different.
You've become the "you" I detest.

My hunger draws extremes from me
to sing a famished song
My toothache rotted in my mouth
to bid to sweet so long...

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This was inspired by an old... Friend...

This isn't you;
In your tight jeans
with a cigarette between your teeth.
You're not "misunderstood,"
nor are you "finding yourself."
You are quitting, giving in.
What happened to you?
The perfectly polished hair.
The friendly white smile.
The drinking of cokes, not gin.
You aren't you,
not the "you" I fell in love with.
Not the "you" that you planed to be.
You've become what others wanted.
You've become different.
You've become the "you" I detest.

My hunger draws extremes from me
to sing a famished song
My toothache rotted in my mouth
to bid to sweet so long...

I guess I'm being facetious. The shifting you is an interesting concept as the self can be an important theme in poetry. If you're going for anaphora you may want to repeat the same "you've" consistently throughout the poem, but I'm not the best person to give advice.