Late Nights

[mrwhite]

thanks for the feedback! I've edited it a bit. Here it is:

My mind wanders to the nights
when we heard the crickets sing
on the hill we claimed as ours.
Tiring days made sweet
by the touch of two struggling
lovers hopelessly lost in
search for the eternal. ======thoughts on this? im pointing towards the belief that love is man's attempt to become immortal.
We marveled at the universe,
to places not yet traveled,
to dreams locked in the stars. ===cliched? trying to convey how unattainable, at that time, some of our dreams seemed

Nightly departures brought heartache
but a promise of return. == would and be better used here?
Our arms extended, my hand
interlocked with yours like the roots of
an ancient sycamore tree on familiar earth. ==I kind of like the 'ancient'
And I have yet to let go. or And I will never let go.