05-14-2014, 07:17 AM
Hi,
There is a ton of ideas in this poem, you should try and develop more...Try to simplify, don't worry so much about the form.
U just brush off some topics...so it reads a little cliche, try to get to the bottom of what you are trying to say.
Cheers
Alex
There is a ton of ideas in this poem, you should try and develop more...Try to simplify, don't worry so much about the form.
U just brush off some topics...so it reads a little cliche, try to get to the bottom of what you are trying to say.
Cheers
Alex