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#8
05-12-2014, 06:28 AM
Lisa,

Drop the "and" at the start of any sentence.

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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no name (yet) - by Lisa - 02-07-2014, 08:34 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by cidermaid - 02-07-2014, 10:45 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by rowens - 02-08-2014, 07:42 AM
RE: no name (yet) - by Lisa - 02-09-2014, 05:38 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by benno_422 - 05-08-2014, 08:11 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by bbcashdollar - 05-08-2014, 08:42 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by HitchBitch - 05-11-2014, 11:30 PM
RE: no name (yet) - by Erthona - 05-12-2014, 06:28 AM
RE: no name (yet) - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:18 AM



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