Delusions

[Brownlie]

Hi Brownlie.

Structurally, the form works well. The meter holds the way through. Perhaps consider finding a replacement for "anew" in your second-last stanza to avoid repeating it with the one before. Not a huge deal, though something you might like to think about stylistically. Also, while the punctuation in the last stanza works fine, it isn't consistent with the the rest of the piece - I'd suggest go one way or another with that.

I won't attempt to comment on your allusions Brownlie - you're quite the worldly person, and I'm not familiar with many of those you've outlined. Suffice to say it was an enjoyable read regardless for me.

Thanks for the opportunity, a privilege to work on one of your constructions. Hope I've helped in some small way

SM

Thanks for reading, you made some good suggestions.