05-10-2014, 12:19 PM
i think i see what you're attempting.
he poem is written to be a good poem it's written for the sole purpose of critique...i think. on there own each verse works well except the 2nd whose 1st line i cannot decipher. there seems to be some good lines here but it's hard to name them as most of them lead nowhere. the meter and end rhyme work well but again fail more than a lot (for me)as the content is too much of a ramble. i'm think the poem was done this way purposefully in which case it does actually feel as it succeeds. i'm on the fence here, i hate it and like it a lot. i'm not sure if i'm stupid or the poem is
thanks for the read
he poem is written to be a good poem it's written for the sole purpose of critique...i think. on there own each verse works well except the 2nd whose 1st line i cannot decipher. there seems to be some good lines here but it's hard to name them as most of them lead nowhere. the meter and end rhyme work well but again fail more than a lot (for me)as the content is too much of a ramble. i'm think the poem was done this way purposefully in which case it does actually feel as it succeeds. i'm on the fence here, i hate it and like it a lot. i'm not sure if i'm stupid or the poem is
thanks for the read