05-04-2014, 12:40 AM
Great to see red oak featured in a poem. I like the idea of comparing it to a pastor. I also like the swing image and the skyline image.
Red oaks don't typically produce fresh sap, unless there are injuries, so that image was distracting to me. Had this been a maple or another species known for producing sap then I would have liked this image very much. Maybe something else that it delivered can be used here instead, like shade.
Red oaks don't typically produce fresh sap, unless there are injuries, so that image was distracting to me. Had this been a maple or another species known for producing sap then I would have liked this image very much. Maybe something else that it delivered can be used here instead, like shade.