Under the Porch Light

[71degrees]

Don't get me wrong...I DO like your poem. But you've already told me you are "putting this one to bed" so I'm not sure what you really want. Listen to Jimmy Durante's version of "When You're Young at Heart" This is the best version out there for the message you are working toward that " people generally continue to feel young in their hearts as they age." I agree, until their bodies or their minds won't allow it any longer. And all poems are worth more than a dime. I was being facetious. Mine are so yours must be By the way, I'm almost 70...I'm not "old" either, but I have buried both parents and a sister. I know a thing or two about this subject, too.

Just so you'll know, I thought better of my "dime" remark, and I deleted it before you posted. I didn't mean to be snarky.

As I said a few posts up, I'm concerned that I was romanticizing old age when I wrote this in my late 40's, and I think you're reacting to that. People get less romantic as they age.

I want to put the poem to "bed" in the sense that I want to get it in final form and don't want to bother with it any more.

I have also buried both parents and a sister.

Thanks again for your feedback! I'll look up the Durante song.

Have you seen some of the comments in other posts? No such thing as "snarky" around here. Swing away. Frank Sinatra version is good, but Durante version is better.

"People get less romantic as they age" It's more work these days, I'll grant you, but the rewards are better than they used to be. Not exactly sure how young you mean by "young"....but young folks I know take certain things for granted. When you start taking your partner for granted, you're toast. Look at the divorce rate...lots of toast our there. I'm liking your poem more and more.