I Wished I Was The Water -edited

[Mopkins]

Hi Gestalt

thanks for reading and commenting. the reason I didn't add lucky to the last stanza is that for me, when I read it aloud, it made the line awkward and too long in comparison to the following line, besides being repetitive. - happy might work but to me it's a bit of a stretch to attribute emotion to the water drops, and it's a bit distracting from the sensual tone I'm trying to set. Thanks for the suggestion tho, and the time taken.


Marianne