Falling

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dale

haha yea.... maybe im just high.

Ha ha. Maybe you should consider chilling before you write. I am not going to be over critical of you because I was just the same when I was ten years old...but we all grow up. Do not post poetry which you know is rubbish....helpful members are giving time to improve poetic endeavour on this site. Your response to this comment will indicate whether or not you are worth bothering with. Frankly, as this sort of nonsense is dumped here by the skip-load it is of no consequence either way UNLESS you feel differently.
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Tall falling snow slices
like a blunt knife,
under the bright shadows
of the stars’ flash –
can’t match stillness
of boy’s mom.

He would have been a lot more humane to have used a sharp knife on his mum.
TS

Please restrict your crit to the poem. This is unacceptable as critique.
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