04-23-2014, 02:42 PM
hello DoctorCam, thanks for commenting, it's appreciated. Scorpio curious is a bit vague - I'll think on that. The full stop after ground was intentional, but I forgot the Capital T for touches - thanks for pointing that out.
Hi Dale,
I've read your poem. Methinks you are still somewhat of of a dragon
but a very nice one - Like Puff the Magic Dragon perhaps....
Hi Hippy, thanks for your time and thought
you're right, it does make it sound like it's the wind that's blushing.... I'll have to fiddle with it...
perhaps 'around the crimsoned tree who's blushing'
I like your suggestion of saucily shimmering leaves, but it's the tree he's 'mating' with, not the leaves.
onslaught i used mainly for assonance with love, it does sound a bit rough I agree, but the autumn wind is a little rough in it's removal of leaves from the tree.
Gothically was meant to reference those gothic love stories where the hero often tears away the heroines dress in his lust... whether or not modern day goths are as excitable I don't know.... Still, it's vague, thanks for pointing that out.
Marianne
Hi Dale,
I've read your poem. Methinks you are still somewhat of of a dragon
but a very nice one - Like Puff the Magic Dragon perhaps....Hi Hippy, thanks for your time and thought
you're right, it does make it sound like it's the wind that's blushing.... I'll have to fiddle with it...
perhaps 'around the crimsoned tree who's blushing'
I like your suggestion of saucily shimmering leaves, but it's the tree he's 'mating' with, not the leaves.
onslaught i used mainly for assonance with love, it does sound a bit rough I agree, but the autumn wind is a little rough in it's removal of leaves from the tree.
Gothically was meant to reference those gothic love stories where the hero often tears away the heroines dress in his lust... whether or not modern day goths are as excitable I don't know.... Still, it's vague, thanks for pointing that out.
Marianne