The Autumn Wind -edited
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(04-21-2014, 10:35 PM)Erthona Wrote:  Mar,

I like the idea but the rhythm falls a little flat, plus "Scorpio curious" seems an odd way to start the poem, maybe it is an idiom with which I am unfamiliar.

Dale
Hi Dale , that was quick

Scorpios are supposed to have big sexual appetites - to those into astrology it's fairly well known I think... hence scorpio curious. reading it over it's not very lyrical, but I wasn't rhyming or writing in meter so a distinct rhythm didn't seem important.

Thanks for looking and commenting.



Marianne
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The Autumn Wind -edited - by Mopkins - 04-21-2014, 10:10 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Erthona - 04-21-2014, 10:35 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Mopkins - 04-21-2014, 10:42 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by TheDoctorCam - 04-23-2014, 12:55 AM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Mopkins - 04-23-2014, 02:42 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Erthona - 04-23-2014, 04:45 AM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by kindofahippy - 04-23-2014, 05:12 AM



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