04-21-2014, 10:42 PM
(04-21-2014, 10:35 PM)Erthona Wrote: Mar,Hi Dale , that was quick
I like the idea but the rhythm falls a little flat, plus "Scorpio curious" seems an odd way to start the poem, maybe it is an idiom with which I am unfamiliar.
Dale
Scorpios are supposed to have big sexual appetites - to those into astrology it's fairly well known I think... hence scorpio curious. reading it over it's not very lyrical, but I wasn't rhyming or writing in meter so a distinct rhythm didn't seem important.
Thanks for looking and commenting.
Marianne