The Autumn Wind -edited
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Mar,

I like the idea but the rhythm falls a little flat, plus "Scorpio curious" seems an odd way to start the poem, maybe it is an idiom with which I am unfamiliar.

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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The Autumn Wind -edited - by Mopkins - 04-21-2014, 10:10 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Erthona - 04-21-2014, 10:35 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Mopkins - 04-21-2014, 10:42 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by TheDoctorCam - 04-23-2014, 12:55 AM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Mopkins - 04-23-2014, 02:42 PM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by Erthona - 04-23-2014, 04:45 AM
RE: The Autumn Wind - by kindofahippy - 04-23-2014, 05:12 AM



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