The Onion

[tectak]

Light filters to me through leaves
camouflaging the back field Awkward syntax...partly due to overwordiness.
as I lean, palms pressed upon cool marble, "As" is a non-dependant filler. If you were not leaning against cool marble would the other conditions vanish? Drop the as. Period after field. Capital "I", new sentence. Period after recipes.
over a spine-broken book of your recipes; Over over-over modified.

dog-eared, well-thumbed, Capital D on dog
inclined agin a rolling pin, Like agin, but not a lot
it instructs me
to peel and slice an onion. You cannot be serious! This is the end of the first sentence. Punctuate to clarity

Clasping the gleaming orb Faux-poetic, as someone on this site will agree
worked from earth, my elbow yields
to density, then rebounds What this mean?
from the board's wooden knell. You are off on a ship afloat in alphabet soup. board's wooden knell means nothing to me. Help

I nick and strip it's sere brown skin, Again, over-modified
center and split to reveal Read and repent.It makes no sense
two pale discs of morning sun
and eclipsing one, begin to slice. Would be nice if clearly expressed

My dull blade chaws and stutters
through thick rotations, tearing layers
into one another and releasing
a keen earthy tang

that confronts and quickens
then blurs the senses
with concentrated tears; a furrowing
that needles the very middle of the mind.

But the sting is salved
when I scrape the grey mulch What? Enough
into smoking oil and it spits and sizzles,
simmering to golden translucent clarity,

liberating a sweet-savoury aroma
that stimulates a deeply satisfying
insatiable hunger to understand something
so much simpler and yet more accomplished than I.

...needs work...but doesn't everything.
Workshop it.
Best,
tectak