I'm sorry, this fails miserably as a newbie love poem because:
a) you did not use the word crimson
b) you have only misused 32% of your adjectives
c) you did not mix mythologies
Good attempt though, do keep writing
a) you did not use the word crimson
b) you have only misused 32% of your adjectives
c) you did not mix mythologies
Good attempt though, do keep writing
It could be worse