04-01-2014, 04:00 PM
Nicely done. No crits. It is in the fun scetion, but I like it as it is in fact...
On a personal level this one is spot on for someone v close to me to vocalise what she is feeling about her ex-fiancée - who dumped her and broke off the engagement with no explanation on boxing day, did not speak to her for four weeks; then made up with her the week before she took off to NZ and said he would join her over there. Then told her he was not on the flight and not going to join her, four hours before he was due to land. She had a complete breakdown and had to come home for the last two years he has had kept her at arms length but then kept dangling the idea of getting back together with his counterfeit promises of commitment and love. She was so hopelessly in love that she was totally blind...finally yesterday she woke up, got angry and told him to sling his hook. (With much celebration from me). So this might be posted in the fun with a topical title (how apt), but for this reader your words are perfect - almost like they were written to order. I would have liked a bit more character assassination, but the manipulative crappy acting could have been taken from observational notes! After she has read this perhaps she will send it the to the git that has stolen four years from her life with his faux love.
Thanks for posting.
On a personal level this one is spot on for someone v close to me to vocalise what she is feeling about her ex-fiancée - who dumped her and broke off the engagement with no explanation on boxing day, did not speak to her for four weeks; then made up with her the week before she took off to NZ and said he would join her over there. Then told her he was not on the flight and not going to join her, four hours before he was due to land. She had a complete breakdown and had to come home for the last two years he has had kept her at arms length but then kept dangling the idea of getting back together with his counterfeit promises of commitment and love. She was so hopelessly in love that she was totally blind...finally yesterday she woke up, got angry and told him to sling his hook. (With much celebration from me). So this might be posted in the fun with a topical title (how apt), but for this reader your words are perfect - almost like they were written to order. I would have liked a bit more character assassination, but the manipulative crappy acting could have been taken from observational notes! After she has read this perhaps she will send it the to the git that has stolen four years from her life with his faux love.
Thanks for posting.