Evolution

[tectak]

walls, deer, pseudo poetry... aside...

This is written for people with enormous lungs, on first reading I found myself gasping for air at the end of each line. Which is not a bad way to frighten off the speed reading skimmers.

some very nice word placement sinister/right, dog/wolf etc.
anthropomorphic, and that whole line, is rather inelegantly phrased - I like the idea behind it, but back to the issue of lung capacity.

Phew!
Are you a man or a mouse?
I spend a lot of time trying to fit anthropomorphic into poetry...Dale gives me brownie points each time I do....but I do agree that the sentiment is greater than the syntax....what to do? What to do? What to do?


Best,
tectak