Trinity of Existence

[ChristopherSea]

Welcome to the site Izo and thanks for the comments on your post. Personally, I felt that there was not much incentive to work through this theme. The poem is burdened with too much abstraction. The piece is also cluttered with capitalized words, for some kind of forced emphasis I assume. This gimmick fails in a piece with no punctuation and an arbitrary capitalization of the first words of each line. There is a spattering of images and metaphors in some individual lines, but the poem would fare better with a central one to bring the piece together. This needs heavy editing. It stands as pseudo-existential diatribe as is. Good luck with your next edit./Chris