03-05-2014, 01:35 AM
I like the edits.
Especially the line about the repossessed cars - a fine description of what isn't there.
There's something slightly awry in the tone in a parts - like the boy running wild - is he?
Especially the line about the repossessed cars - a fine description of what isn't there.
There's something slightly awry in the tone in a parts - like the boy running wild - is he?