The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1

The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1

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03-04-2014, 11:44 AM

Well, I've tried to edit to clarity, but I think I may have pulled the focus off the boy. All critique welcomed.

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The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1 - by ellajam - 03-01-2014, 10:47 PM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by Erthona - 03-02-2014, 05:05 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-02-2014, 05:12 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by justcloudy - 03-02-2014, 05:16 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-02-2014, 05:48 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by jeremyyoung - 03-02-2014, 07:41 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-02-2014, 08:01 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by jeremyyoung - 03-02-2014, 08:08 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-02-2014, 09:51 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by Erthona - 03-02-2014, 10:48 AM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-02-2014, 12:24 PM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by cidermaid - 03-03-2014, 05:16 PM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ellajam - 03-03-2014, 09:39 PM

RE: (I want to) Scoop Him Up - by ChristopherSea - 03-03-2014, 09:20 PM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by ellajam - 03-04-2014, 11:44 AM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by tomoffing - 03-04-2014, 09:08 PM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by ellajam - 03-05-2014, 11:35 AM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by jeremyyoung - 03-05-2014, 01:35 AM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by heslopian - 03-05-2014, 07:04 AM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by jeremyyoung - 03-05-2014, 12:13 PM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by ellajam - 03-05-2014, 12:53 PM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by jeremyyoung - 03-05-2014, 11:10 PM

RE: One Boy (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #1 - by ellajam - 03-05-2014, 11:39 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by ellajam - 03-27-2014, 08:17 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by ChristopherSea - 03-27-2014, 08:34 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by ellajam - 03-27-2014, 09:28 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by ChristopherSea - 03-27-2014, 09:41 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by ellajam - 03-27-2014, 09:54 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2 - by jeremyyoung - 03-27-2014, 09:51 PM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1 - by ellajam - 03-28-2014, 03:03 AM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1 - by 71degrees - 03-28-2014, 01:07 AM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1 - by Ui Domhnaill - 04-06-2014, 12:23 AM

RE: The Kids Ain't Alright (Formerly Scoop Him Up) edit #2.1 - by ellajam - 04-06-2014, 12:41 AM

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