03-02-2014, 08:08 AM
(03-02-2014, 08:01 AM)ellajam Wrote:I was partly teasing... though perhaps offering pointers as to possible titles.(03-02-2014, 07:41 AM)jeremyyoung Wrote: The title is the problem for me... what does scoop him up mean? Like dog dirt? Like in a roundup by the authorities? Like water on a ladle? Ice cream?Thanks for reading and for your comments, Jeremy. I am title challenge so I will surely think about this one. I meant scoop like scoop him up in my arms, like a backhoe reaches in and scoops up and removes. I'm not married to it.
There a some very good rhymes in this piece - particularly like cry and bitter-lie.
I appreciate your time, welcome again.

