Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem)

Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem)

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02-18-2014, 02:23 AM

I am very new to the game of professional poetry, so I can't read a whole lot into meter, but I feel that "Yields" instead of "Yield" would lend a better flow. Also, great poem, that added some sparkle to my day!

*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line

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Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by alatos - 02-11-2014, 12:14 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by newsclippings - 02-11-2014, 02:48 PM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by visualcondyle - 02-13-2014, 02:51 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by Blunt - 02-13-2014, 03:47 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by Erthona - 02-13-2014, 04:45 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by TheWall0912 - 02-15-2014, 04:54 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by alatos - 02-17-2014, 08:26 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by just mercedes - 02-17-2014, 08:41 AM

RE: Better Raw the Taste of Vision (a short poem) - by kindofahippy - 02-18-2014, 02:23 AM

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