Look Within

[shemthepenman]

LOOK WITHIN

My image is a facade of life's dilemma's.
People see the outside without wondering
what's within.

Nobody sees the gaping wound in my chest,
split open as if one had opened a sealed box with a blade.

It still beats with the usual thump, thump, thump,
but bleeds so slowly as if it were a balloon losing air over time.

The patches have been placed with care but drips of rich
red blood drip, drip, drip as the bandages wear.

As time passes the wound becomes massive,
the red droplets start to flow as if it were a winding river.

Still, I stand my ground and wonder. Will you save me or wait until it's too late?

I really like some of the physicality in this. Unfortunately, I don't think it sits well with the more abstract 'message' that I suspect you are trying to get across.

The 'split open like...' Line is great, but again very physical, and I am not sure how it fits, conceptually.

Anyhow, thanks for sharing. Look forward to more.