01-29-2014, 10:11 PM
Third and last (I think) edit posted.
Dinosta I thought more about your suggestions and added in a line about the cafe cups, I think you were right that it made it more commonplace, more human. Thanks for that.
71 I couldn't find anything to replace hate but I'm going back to the original, without anything, I think you were right that it was too much. It sounded nice but it didn't add much of anything at all.
Thanks to everyone for help with this one!! I'm quite happy with it now. =]
-justcloudy
Dinosta I thought more about your suggestions and added in a line about the cafe cups, I think you were right that it made it more commonplace, more human. Thanks for that.
71 I couldn't find anything to replace hate but I'm going back to the original, without anything, I think you were right that it was too much. It sounded nice but it didn't add much of anything at all.
Thanks to everyone for help with this one!! I'm quite happy with it now. =]
-justcloudy
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.