Mother Nature

[Sequel]

To be honest I don't agree with most people's criticism of your rhyme scheme. Nothing seemed forced to me, and that means a lot coming from my direction considering I usually detest rhyme schemes such as this one. However, I do agree that the piece could do without the cliches/unimpressive descriptions. "...time would stand still" and "bright light" could've been written in a different manner. Other than that, I enjoyed it!! Great job.