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01-24-2014, 08:27 AM

Interesting thoughts Dinosta, thank you. You may be right about the samba, thanks for pointing that out. As for the rest, I think I'll stick with the revision, but do appreciate your contribution. =]

71, I must admit I chose "hate" largely for the sonics. I don't love it either, so I will think about how I can change it. I like the "blood eruptions" suggestion, but I'm not sure if I like it enough to change it. ;p Will have a think.

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Sunday afternoon-- edit 3 - by justcloudy - 01-21-2014, 08:02 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by justcloudy - 01-22-2014, 08:04 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by 71degrees - 01-22-2014, 08:45 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by justcloudy - 01-22-2014, 09:23 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by trueenigma - 01-22-2014, 09:27 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by justcloudy - 01-22-2014, 09:30 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by trueenigma - 01-22-2014, 09:37 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon - by ellajam - 01-22-2014, 11:35 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by justcloudy - 01-22-2014, 08:06 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by ellajam - 01-22-2014, 08:56 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by justcloudy - 01-22-2014, 09:55 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by trueenigma - 01-22-2014, 11:01 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by justcloudy - 01-23-2014, 06:06 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 1 - by trueenigma - 01-23-2014, 06:15 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 2 - by justcloudy - 01-23-2014, 06:48 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 2 - by Dinosta - 01-23-2014, 01:39 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 2 - by 71degrees - 01-24-2014, 03:07 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 2 - by justcloudy - 01-24-2014, 08:27 AM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 3 - by justcloudy - 01-29-2014, 10:11 PM

RE: Sunday afternoon-- edit 3 - by trueenigma - 01-30-2014, 04:05 AM

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